Sunday, November 25, 2012

Quick.


It happened quickly.  That’s what would be said.  After it was over.  It happened so quickly. 

Quick.  Too bad those quick moments won’t ever leave.  Too bad they keep replaying.  But they do.  Quickly.

It was raining.  Pouring, really.  And there was lighting.  In the dark of a sky just past twilight, it looked like the strobe light at a dance party.  Except more erratic. 

Driving in the rain is like asking for something to go wrong.  Especially when driving up a windy hill on a road that’s too narrow.  Already know what’s gonna happen, right?

Sure.

But there’s something to be said of accidents.  People just can’t look away.

Work ran late today.  Hurry home.  In the rain.  Tried to beat the rain.  But outrunning weather is like trying not to hit roadkill.  Pointless.  Messy.  And really bad for the car.

So close to home.  But there’s this section of road that goes up the bluff.  That was never designed for the recent influx of traffic.  That’s dangerous enough when only one car is on it.

This part of the drive is always dreaded.  But it’s so close to home, it hardly matters.  Already thoughts of what’s going on at home.  Dinner cooking.  Favorite TV shows to watch after.  A glass of wine and a cozy blanket. 

The song on the radio lulls senses into false security.  The car turns and begins the ascent it won’t finish.  Singing along loudly to the radio.  Drowning out the patter of rain.  Ignoring the bright flashes of the storm.  And trying to ignore the stark light of the oncoming cars. 

Then there’s a pair of lights that’s coming too close.  That’s in the wrong lane.  That’s-

When this part replays, it’s still fuzzy.  Except for the churning stomach.  And the shock that courses through every nerve ending.

There’s a rushing feeling.  And hardness. That’s the glass and steering wheel.  But is the rushing rain or blood?   It’s hard to tell. 

Lights are still flashing.  They soon become red and blue. 

It happened so quickly.

3 comments:

  1. You didn't actually get in a car accident? Because honestly, this felt a little bit too real for comfort. (Weird story, I rushed to facebook to see if you had posted about a car accident and the post at the top of my feed was a different friend who had JUST gotten in a car accident. Spooky right?)

    This is an excellent piece of flash fiction. Car crashes are hard. I remember reading a piece about a car crash in one of my fiction writing classes and it was like twice as long, gave three times as much detail and was half as good.

    I think the beauty of this piece is in its simplicity. You capture just a few important moments and a couple of strong scattered feelings. Even though we know what's going to happen, we still read on with a sense of dread.

    Well done. :)

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  2. Lol. No, I wasn't in a car accident. Sorry, there was some confusion about that! I put fiction and flash fiction as tags...

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  3. Also too close for comfort for me as well. But I think that's what makes this piece great--it's so realistic. The choppy sentences, almost a bit of distortion.

    I remember the one huge car accident I was in, and I had three friends in the car with me on our way to a KEY Club meeting across town, and granted, it wasn't as serious, but the things that went through my head, how the entire situation looked from my memory, this really reminded me of it. It's almost slow-motion, but it's incredibly fast. I'm not quite sure how to explain what I felt, but this piece really hit the nail.

    Loved this piece. I'm sorry I didn't comment on it earlier! <3

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